http://tasvideos.org/forum/viewtopic.php?p=207752#207752 You can find the latest version of my run from that post.
I'll check your WIP.
Edit:
Well, I watched it. And I'd have to say it's a good test run, but only that. It's extremely unoptimized and missing a lot of tricks and improvements. For some specifics, check out my movie.
Also, I see that you're attempting a no-damage run, which I give a huge thumbs-down to, and so will probably all of the voters. There's no reason to not take damage to save time, which can be done all over the place.
Though, if this is your first attempt at a TAS, I'm very impressed. But you've still got a little work to do if you want to get this published. If you are not too discouraged at the prospect of starting all over, I might be interested in working with you; you certainly do have patience.
Edit 2:
Watching it again, I see something interesting that I missed on my run: You got up to the cage in Bongo Hills 1. I probably should have done that. Also, I have to wonder why you aren't getting any cages, especially in Twilight Gulch 1 where it is possible to get all 6 cages on the first runthrough, making it a waste of time to come back to the level later even with the running power.